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she dances like a raindrop,
collapses on the ground,
and all of her bones shatter,
made from thin, liquid glass,
her voice ripples on the surface
and it screams
the soft syllables pirouetting on your eardrums
her fingertips tapping
can you hear them?
they are cotton balls
being dropped on the asphalt
can you hear them?
(it's the wind carrying her feet across the air)
and she dances like a raindrop.
you can catch her
and she can shatter in your palms.
it's not about anything. i just wrote it and it sucks bootyhole
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:iconadagiobunny:
Adagiobunny Feb 9, 2013  Student Writer
i can hear the contrast in your words - the sharp shatter to the soft drip, drop, smooth & light & heavy at once.
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jaani-androphile Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
hehe thank you :D
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:iconadagiobunny:
Adagiobunny Feb 10, 2013  Student Writer
most welcome! :)
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CrematedMan Oct 26, 2012  Student Writer
I enjoyed it, it didn't seem to have a point, but sounded beautiful.
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:iconjaani-androphile:
jaani-androphile Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hahah poetry opens many doors! you can choose which one to go through. c: (loosely quoted from Jim Morrison yay) thank you very much c:
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:iconmistressofquills:
MistressofQuills Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
no no it's beautiful! i love the way you describe - it's like you're painting a picture fro the reader!
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:iconjaani-androphile:
jaani-androphile Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very very much :D
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:iconmistressofquills:
MistressofQuills Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
you're very very welcome:D
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:iconmynaophelia:
absolutely beautiful <3
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:iconjaani-androphile:
jaani-androphile Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much :D
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